A great 100-word challenge entry, Indy. I really liked how you used dialogue (particularly split dialogue) and gave the reader an insight into what you were thinking. Attenborough once did a show on the Galapagos Islands and they look amazing! There’s so many interesting species there.
The only thing I would improve is to perhaps use a more precise verb than “came” to say how you left the plane.
Great work Indy! I look forward to your entry next week!
I really enjoyed this 100WC Indy. You have used dialogue very effectively in your story. It must have been very exciting for your character to finally see real tortoises! Great writing – well done 🙂
when you said were here it should be we’re here
A great 100-word challenge entry, Indy. I really liked how you used dialogue (particularly split dialogue) and gave the reader an insight into what you were thinking. Attenborough once did a show on the Galapagos Islands and they look amazing! There’s so many interesting species there.
The only thing I would improve is to perhaps use a more precise verb than “came” to say how you left the plane.
Great work Indy! I look forward to your entry next week!
I really enjoyed this 100WC Indy. You have used dialogue very effectively in your story. It must have been very exciting for your character to finally see real tortoises! Great writing – well done 🙂