I like how you keep the reader guessing at first by just describing it as ‘an unusual sight’. The use of dialogue helps me to know it must look quite gruesome but perhaps you could aim to paint a bit more of a picture in your reader’s mind to make that image outside of the window really strong. Keep up the good work, Nadine!
I like how you keep the reader guessing at first by just describing it as ‘an unusual sight’. The use of dialogue helps me to know it must look quite gruesome but perhaps you could aim to paint a bit more of a picture in your reader’s mind to make that image outside of the window really strong. Keep up the good work, Nadine!